I need help with this story I'm writing? I'm 14?

Need to improve your spelling and diction some. Otherwise pick up a copy of Writer's Digest at a magazine store and then check back issues or subscribe yourself. This is the Writer's bible for teaching young writers the ups and downs of writing. A lot of very good authors today have gotten great starts using this magazine over the years. If it can help authors, screenwriters, producers and poets, I am sure that it can help you too. Maybe I will read one of your books some day. Enjoy!